Hey guys, I would love to hear your opinions on my short film that i've made. This is my 2nd short film including my student short film from last year.
We spent about $300 for the whole short film, pre-production to completion. We didn't have much money to make the movie to begin with, so we went in and hoped for the best. The crew was very small too, but I guess we have to start somewhere
I encountered many problems, which you'd expect for such a low budget short film (especially actors), but I've learnt from those mistakes as I begin writing my next short film and hope for a much better output for the next one.
We got busted by the police for the traffic light scene with helicopters and all, but they were nice enough to let us go.
enjoy and let me know what you think
http://vimeo.com/18583050
PASSWORD: purgatory01
I'd appreciate it if you 'like' the page for extra support for our little crew of young film makers
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Psygnosis84 said:
Hey guys, I would love to hear your opinions on my short film that i've made. This is my 2nd short film including my student short film from last year.
We spent about $300 for the whole short film, pre-production to completion. We didn't have much money to make the movie to begin with, so we went in and hoped for the best. The crew was very small too, but I guess we have to start somewhere
I encountered many problems, which you'd expect for such a low budget short film (especially actors), but I've learnt from those mistakes as I begin writing my next short film and hope for a much better output for the next one.
We got busted by the police for the traffic light scene with helicopters and all, but they were nice enough to let us go.
enjoy and let me know what you think
http://vimeo.com/18583050
PASSWORD: purgatory01
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Sounds like you had some fun doing that! I would watch it, but I have to watch my download use for the rest of January... 10 days and we have used up 3/5 of our quota... and the movie file size is about 350mb I think it says, so tomorrow morning (off-peak ;D). Looks rather professional in the very first part!
Jonathon Grigg said:
Sounds like you had some fun doing that! I would watch it, but I have to watch my download use for the rest of January... 10 days and we have used up 3/5 of our quota... and the movie file size is about 350mb I think it says, so tomorrow morning (off-peak ;D). Looks rather professional in the very first part!
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It was very challenging, especially shooting the whole film guerrilla style with no permission from the council, but I guess that's half the fun
looking forward to your feedback/criticism
Jonathon Grigg said:
Sounds like you had some fun doing that! I would watch it, but I have to watch my download use for the rest of January... 10 days and we have used up 3/5 of our quota... and the movie file size is about 350mb I think it says, so tomorrow morning (off-peak ;D). Looks rather professional in the very first part!
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life is great living off a feeding tube isnt it
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i think it was a bit too much of "dream in the dream" stuff , and i miss a happy ending , whys it called purgatory then ?
after purgatory folks end up in heaven but the ending story isnt what id call heaven
That was much more professional than what I was expecting. Good job.
Psygnosis84 said:
It was very challenging, especially shooting the whole film guerrilla style with no permission from the council, but I guess that's half the fun
looking forward to your feedback/criticism
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That's more than half the fun! I have had some friends make very very short films, one of them they dressed up as a yeti and walked around the local streets So many cars stopped! I think one even started chasing them... still good times. I'll do my best in helping you with advice etc!
Will have a look and post later
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Psygnosis84 said:
Hey guys, I would love to hear your opinions on my short film that i've made. This is my 2nd short film including my student short film from last year.
We spent about $300 for the whole short film, pre-production to completion. We didn't have much money to make the movie to begin with, so we went in and hoped for the best. The crew was very small too, but I guess we have to start somewhere
I encountered many problems, which you'd expect for such a low budget short film (especially actors), but I've learnt from those mistakes as I begin writing my next short film and hope for a much better output for the next one.
We got busted by the police for the traffic light scene with helicopters and all, but they were nice enough to let us go.
enjoy and let me know what you think
http://vimeo.com/18583050
PASSWORD: purgatory01
I'd appreciate it if you 'like' the page for extra support for our little crew of young film makers
http://www.facebook.com/pages/Aurolis-Pictures/333582799758
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Well, firstly, you have a great camera-man! Those panning shots were smooth and I didn't see much if any shuddering etc. The focus is great, works especially well with the lights in the night, gives it some visual depth.
Music was soft and helpful for meaning in some scenes, and that keychain/locket was a good symbol for realising which car it was.
The actors weren't that bad in my opinion, way better than anything I could ever do Like others have said, it's more professional than I was expecting! The storyline was a bit confusing at times (or maybe it was me...) but I guess there's only so much you can fit into 16 minutes, so well done there.
Great job overall, keep up the good work! 'Liked' Maybe you should consider entering it somewhere, I'm not sure what's on in Sydney but it's worth a shot.
Just one thing though, why were you busted for the traffic light scene? Were you there for a while or something? I guess we only saw a tiny bit...
souljaboy said:
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i think it was a bit too much of "dream in the dream" stuff , and i miss a happy ending , whys it called purgatory then ?
after purgatory folks end up in heaven but the ending story isnt what id call heaven
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pur·ga·to·ry (pûrˈgə-tôrˌē, -tōrˌē)
noun pl. purgatories pur·ga·to·ries
A place or condition of suffering, expiation, or remorse: a purgatory of drug abuse.
purgatory; mental anguish or suffering
It's related to his past and the continued mental suffering he had every night. Especially the hallucinations caused by the pills he took to calm his anxiety attacks, which he didn't know were caused by the pills and was always stuck in this loop of events that haunted him, which is why the ending when Sandra's mother takes the pills from him, he is now able to deal with the past better because of the truth but also because the pills aren't there to bring back those hallucinations anymore to play with his mind again.
mikkohypponen said:
That was much more professional than what I was expecting. Good job.
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Thanks , glad you liked it
Jonathon Grigg said:
That's more than half the fun! I have had some friends make very very short films, one of them they dressed up as a yeti and walked around the local streets So many cars stopped! I think one even started chasing them... still good times. I'll do my best in helping you with advice etc!
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Haha, I would've loved to see that!!
The one other thing I have to mention about this movie was the fact that the main character didn't know how to drive a car properly, he was very very bad actually. 'Smoke and mirrors' made him look like a very good driver in the end.
Jonathon Grigg said:
Well, firstly, you have a great camera-man! Those panning shots were smooth and I didn't see much if any shuddering etc. The focus is great, works especially well with the lights in the night, gives it some visual depth.
Music was soft and helpful for meaning in some scenes, and that keychain/locket was a good symbol for realising which car it was.
The actors weren't that bad in my opinion, way better than anything I could ever do Like others have said, it's more professional than I was expecting! The storyline was a bit confusing at times (or maybe it was me...) but I guess there's only so much you can fit into 16 minutes, so well done there.
Great job overall, keep up the good work! 'Liked' Maybe you should consider entering it somewhere, I'm not sure what's on in Sydney but it's worth a shot.
Just one thing though, why were you busted for the traffic light scene? Were you there for a while or something? I guess we only saw a tiny bit...
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We got busted by the cops because we had one car sit in the middle of the road high beaming the main characters car (when his face lights up as the other car speeds up towards him). This was around 11pm and the neighbours probably thought were doing something illegal like preparing for a drag race (we were beaming each other for 10 minutes) All of a sudden the ground illuminates and we look up and see a helicopter shining a light towards us, a minute later police arrive :\
The story was confusing at times but I made it so you essentially had to look back at even the subtle stuff he did, such as taking the pills then immediately after seeing the ghost car and girl to get a drift of the story.
To ease the confusion a bit for everyone, he was chasing himself. I left it open in one of the sections when Sandra reveals her name. In the story the character say's he doesn't know her however if the pills were causing only hallucinations, then how does he know he name. I left this part open for the audience to think for themselves. Did he know her name because of her death being mentioned at school but had completely forgotten about her until that night when he finally chases his own car and meets the girl or was she really a ghost who came down to tell him the truth about her actions.
The story was too complex for a short film but I think it was only after seeing so many simple linear short films that I wanted to take a different approach.
About entering it into festivals. I'm worried that the film isn't "good enough" yet to be shown at film festivals because of the small problems here and there. I'm trying to create a short film that really stands out at the film festivals and I personally don't believe this film is there yet.
Glad you liked it
I'm watching it right now, seen half of it, slow streaming
pretty cool, love it
only you have one problem, the camera shadow appears look at the photo
husam666 said:
I'm watching it right now, seen half of it, slow streaming
pretty cool, love it
only you have one problem, the camera shadow appears look at the photo
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Yeah I noticed that, but I couldn't do anything about it because by the time the other car turns left, it doesn't leave much room to fit in that shot and to give it the same kind of impact. I wanted to cut on the action of the main character turning left to the motion of the car but unfortunately the street lights caused a shadow. In the end, it was a very small problem that I couldn't to cut out because the content of the material was more important than the shadow appearing.
Psygnosis84 said:
We got busted by the cops because we had one car sit in the middle of the road high beaming the main characters car (when his face lights up as the other car speeds up towards him). This was around 11pm and the neighbours probably thought were doing something illegal like preparing for a drag race (we were beaming each other for 10 minutes) All of a sudden the ground illuminates and we look up and see a helicopter shining a light towards us, a minute later police arrive :\
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That would be an experience! You should tell that story at parties and stuff But I guess if I was one of the neighbours I would be a little worried... still at least you got off safe!
The story was confusing at times but I made it so you essentially had to look back at even the subtle stuff he did, such as taking the pills then immediately after seeing the ghost car and girl to get a drift of the story.
To ease the confusion a bit for everyone, he was chasing himself. I left it open in one of the sections when Sandra reveals her name. In the story the character say's he doesn't know her however if the pills were causing only hallucinations, then how does he know he name. I left this part open for the audience to think for themselves. Did he know her name because of her death being mentioned at school but had completely forgotten about her until that night when he finally chases his own car and meets the girl or was she really a ghost who came down to tell him the truth about her actions.
The story was too complex for a short film but I think it was only after seeing so many simple linear short films that I wanted to take a different approach.
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I thought the pills may have had something to do with it! But I was still tired when I was watching it, so it didn't click then But when you say it like that, it does fall into place, so maybe it's a better plot than I thought
And different approaches are always good
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That would be an experience! You should tell that story at parties and stuff But I guess if I was one of the neighbours I would be a little worried... still at least you got off safe!
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Believe it or not, that single traffic light scene was the hardest part of the whole film. We were running against the time especially having to deal with a public road and waiting for the road to clear on both sides for the other car to drive straight through... oh my goodness, what a nightmare hehe.
I thought the pills may have had something to do with it! But I was still tired when I was watching it, so it didn't click then But when you say it like that, it does fall into place, so maybe it's a better plot than I thought
And different approaches are always good
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Thanks hehe, yeah the plot appears to jump here and there but hopefully if the viewers pay attention to the small stuff that happen, then maybe the bigger picture makes more sense.
Hello community,
I'm a songwriter/lyricist and I finished a song last night that really hit home to me and all of my friends think it's one of the best I've written. I'd like to know what you guys think of it, so any feedback is appreciated!
Genre is Rock/Alternative/Indie
The Moment by Logan Smith
When I was younger,
I would do anything
to fall in love slowly and follow my dreams.
And now that I'm older,
I have finally realized
that love and composure have been in my life,
since the day that I met you
and the night I made you my wife.
Girl you can just sit there
with the wind in your hair
and I'll just stand there
with an open stare,
thinking this is the moment.
So slow to the ground I fell on my knees,
hoping and praying that I'm your everything.
And now that I've rested I can finally think,
that baby we are truly one and two meant to be.
Baby we are truly meant to be.
You know what they say about young love,
it doesn't last but I'm sure that's not us
because I really believe
that you are the greatest thing
that ever happened to me.
And I remember when the stars were so bright,
I lowered my head and I held you so tight
And I said, "Now, listen to me carefully please
you know that I love you,
so will you marry me?"
That look on your face made me cry,
I picked my head up and looked in your eye,
knowing that I had just changed my life.
So slow to the ground I fell on my knees,
hoping and praying that I'm your everything.
And now that I've rested I can finally think,
that baby we are truly one and two meant to be.
Baby we are truly meant to be.
If you ever get the chance to fall in love,
make sure you take it,
it may be rough.
But it's worth it.
If you ever fall down make sure you get up,
it may be rough,
but it's worth it.
It's always worth it.
So slow to the ground I fell on my knees,
hoping and praying that I'm your everything.
And now that I've rested I can finally think,
that baby we are truly one and two meant to be.
Baby we are truly meant to be.
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i cant hear anything
nice,
8/10
maybe if you have it recorded you'll get more
Can't really tell as it has no keys or anything but the lyrics are really good and meaningful.
Like it, me does.
-ThingThree
Great song!
I feel like the only one....
Most people I ask tell me "the cgi is great, but I don't get it" or "i hated the way it ended" or "I don't understand why they needed brains" or "the acting sucked".
Was it really THAT bad?
I hate it. The acting is as bad as it gets. The script is even worse. If anyone here hasn't seen it, just watch the trailer. That's the whole movie.
The special effects is the only thing i liked.
Yes that one was a real turd. The chi was OK and the acting was bearable. But when I think back, it was just a waste of my not so pressures time.
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I hate it. The acting is as bad as it gets. The script is even worse. If anyone here hasn't seen it, just watch the trailer. That's the whole movie.
The special effects is the only thing i liked.
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Then I'm better of playing Crysis 2 again. And again.
I watched skyline for the first 10 minutes and then when I saw the black guy from scrubs trying to be a big timer, lol I was like ok I'm done. I like sci-fi movies so I wanted skyline to work but I can only stomach so much. On top of the lame script and horrible acting, the casting looked like it was done by throwing darts at names. Lost my attention quick. But best alien movie I've seen lately. BATTLE LA. Hands down badass!
I hate it too
I agree...Battle LA was awesome.
Skyline was just horribad, but yes, the CGI was impressive. Even though they couldn't seem to nail down the aliens size...something that was several times wider than a human shouldn't be able to fit through a normal door. >_< But the story and acting was just EXCESSIVELY bad.
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I watched skyline for the first 10 minutes and then when I saw the black guy from scrubs trying to be a big timer, lol I was like ok I'm done. I like sci-fi movies so I wanted skyline to work but I can only stomach so much. On top of the lame script and horrible acting, the casting looked like it was done by throwing darts at names. Lost my attention quick. But best alien movie I've seen lately. BATTLE LA. Hands down badass!
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I think Battle: LA could be MUCH better. It's no where near Skyline in "OMG WTF is this", but i think it should have included elements from the real event back in 1942 (more about that here)
I think if they'd make it more like Close Encounters of the Third Kind (since it's more like the real event), it would be better. But as an action movie it works quite well.
So I really am the only one.
Alright one more then....if you HAD to sit through one, would you rather Skyline or those Syfy channel "Movies"? Because those are movies I can't stand. I'm trying to feel my way into why I'm so "off" about this movie (as in, vs. public sentiment).
You're not the only one. GF and I watched it. We thought it was great entertainment and it kept us occupied the entire time.
Hey guys.
I started watching this from its first episode. I like the "what is actually going on here? " feel to it. I stopped watching it every week though cuz now, out of a thirteen episode season, only 2 episodes are dedicated to the bigger picture of the show. The there's 11 filler episodes which is just a man in a dog suit, ****ting on elijahs character for 30 min.
Which is my main problem with the show. I don't wanna watch 30 episodes of a guy acting like a dog just to get to the few episodes that explain things.
I have a few theories though now that I've caught myself up with season 3....
Wilfred is ryans guide through a sort of purgatory due to the over dose being successful. However, I don't like that theory since it's the first thing people think of.
The one in leaning toward the most is, he's like the trickster gods throughout religion.
He creates mayhem, because he enjoys it.
There's two ways that could go though, one, it benefits Elijahs character in some way... Or two, it doesn't. But with the last episode of season 3, with the drawings and his dad and the symbol and the statue....I think it's obvious that he's some metaphysical type of entity.
The statue had the typical Joker type face on him too.
Then there's Bruce. Who im beginning to think is some animal too. Maybe a cat. But I don't know why he wouldn't have a costume on too. But I don't think Bruce is a person in the real world.
I like the concept of this show a lot. However, I hate that the main concept is usual only covered in the first and the last two episodes of each season.
Contemplating getting the S5....
SaintCity86 said:
Hey guys.
I started watching this from its first episode. I like the "what is actually going on here? " feel to it. I stopped watching it every week though cuz now, out of a thirteen episode season, only 2 episodes are dedicated to the bigger picture of the show. The there's 11 filler episodes which is just a man in a dog suit, ****ting on elijahs character for 30 min.
Which is my main problem with the show. I don't wanna watch 30 episodes of a guy acting like a dog just to get to the few episodes that explain things.
I have a few theories though now that I've caught myself up with season 3....
Wilfred is ryans guide through a sort of purgatory due to the over dose being successful. However, I don't like that theory since it's the first thing people think of.
The one in leaning toward the most is, he's like the trickster gods throughout religion.
He creates mayhem, because he enjoys it.
There's two ways that could go though, one, it benefits Elijahs character in some way... Or two, it doesn't. But with the last episode of season 3, with the drawings and his dad and the symbol and the statue....I think it's obvious that he's some metaphysical type of entity.
The statue had the typical Joker type face on him too.
Then there's Bruce. Who im beginning to think is some animal too. Maybe a cat. But I don't know why he wouldn't have a costume on too. But I don't think Bruce is a person in the real world.
I like the concept of this show a lot. However, I hate that the main concept is usual only covered in the first and the last two episodes of each season.
Contemplating getting the S5....
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Sorry, but I have to disagree. To me, Wilfred is Ryan's saviour. Yes everything looks bad, but he always helps him. There have been no end of episodes that start out with Wilfred saying something seemingly innocuous, but then when he repeats it again at the end of the episode it all makes sense and it turns out he was right all along.
I think Wilfred is Ryan's guide and possibly Ryan has been dead all along, like a 6th Sense meets Jacob's Ladder kind of world.
The American version has that long-running back story, but other than that it's staying pretty true to the original. Did you ever watch the Australian one? I'd highly recommend it, and it has nothing to do with the American storyline so it won't spoil anything. You can clearly see the evolution from that to the US version, and that evolution is the attempt to explain Wilfred. The Australian one is pretty much a buddy programme, with a farting, swearing dog.
I love Wilfred and can't wait for the 4th season to start!
Yeah but that's the part of the show I don't like. If he is some metaphysical gaurdian Angel, then why is most the season him acting like a stupid dog. I think they should stay true to the deeper storyline about what's really going on.... Instead of only dedicating 3 episodes to the story, and filling the rest with fart jokes. One things for sure, Wilfred is not being honest. And so far, it seems he's getting worse and worse. For the better eventually...idk
Contemplating getting the S5....